Well you said even late feedback is appreciated so here goes. I just loved this, that Jared was going to be respectful and leave until he caught the fear scent then just needed to protect. And loved the line about offering Fritos might not have conveyed 'will you go out with me' as well as hoped.
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Date: 2014-03-31 02:39 am (UTC)